Belisarius Laughed
By Alicia McKenzie
Story’s total rating: 84.33
The Good: Judge 1thought that it was an original concept to write a
story about young Cable. Judge#2- “An excellent look at Nathan during the
Clan Chosen years. Alicia skillfully depicts the very different culture
from which Nathan Dayspring is from.” Judge #3 – “An interesting fantasy
setting in the wartorn 34th century. Cable is shown in the crucible that
formed him. It is fairly standard fiction, but done with a certain panache
and flair.”
The Bad: Judge 1 thought th- “it was a little hard to follow what was going on.” Judge #1 thought that the plot could have been more thought out and also thought the dialogue left something to be desired. Judge #1 thought that this story might have best been placed in the drama category. The plot could have been more developed according to Judge #1.
The Summary: Donna Gibson aka Phoenix-Gal helped me out by writing this summary, “In the distant future, Nathan Dayspring leads the Clan Chosen, fighting against the Canaanites in an attempt to free and ally themselves with the city of Tsimshara.” Go Donna and Alicia Go!
Story’s total rating: 86.50
The Good: Judge #1 had to say, “Excellent use of Kaylee's original character, Kai. This story was thought of as “very effective” with “great suspense.” According to Judge #1, “This is an excellent story. Well plotted, with strong character development. A fascinating look at Askani and Canaanite ritual, and an excellent examination of Cable's past. Alicia did an admirable job writing Kaylee's original character, Kai.” Judge 2 has this to say, “An interesting take on the nature of Cable as warrior combined with his cleaving to the traditions of his birth. Cleverly written.”
The Bad: Judge 1 had more a neutral comment to say, “Yes, the shifts in POV were a little disconcerting, yet still effective.” Judge 2 had to add that, “the use of Kai and the others is very extranious to the story, and tends to disrupt the flow.”
The Summary: Cable gets a mysterious message that makes him do a disappearing act. Kai, Logan, G.W. Bridge, and Domino go to discover what’s going on in this excellent story that reveals part of Cable’s past.
