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Edward R. Tufte, The Cognitive Style of PowerPoint; The Rhetoric and the Poetics of Aristotle
You provided a good reflection of Tufte and argument. Your use of Aristotle was less convincing [I had drawn examples from poetics, rather than rhetoric]. The paper didn't follow the requirements of the assignment as you probably have recognized. [further corrections included a reminder to use active voice construction and mechanical/grammar errors.]
Paul Watzlawick, The Language of Change
I think you missed Watzlawick's point, as well as its connection to and in other work, especially Aristotle. What [he] argued to as a grammar was not the prescriptive grammar kids learn in school, but the linguist's meaning, i.e., a personal description the right hemisphere, language's underlying structure. [further corrections: I had attempted to relate his rules of grammar to psychoanalysis, to which she replied: he specifically doesn't do psychoanalysis, which is another kind of treatment.]
Kathleen Hall Jamieson, Eloquence in an Electronic Age As you recognized, you're skipping over your own ideas here. Start the essay with a [something] statement of the author's thesis. This might help you coalesce your thoughts.
Case Study: Fluoridation in Greenfield
A short bit; you need to crunch some of the core numbersand address other data to discover why the issue meets with resistance. This is pretty thin as it stands.
Individual Project Proposal
I think this will work [refers to paragraph about medication research studies], if you choose one drug -- Viagra comes to mind, as does the new alternative to Viagra (whose name I can't recall at the moment). Phen-Fen (sp?) the diet drug is another possibility.
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