Messages Raves

Message: 2 Date: Mon, 08 Nov 1999 11:11:44 CET
From: "Camilla Sandman" <cammy_sandy@xxxxxxx.xxx>Subject: Re: Messages.
Hahaha, I had quite a laugh!!! If it weren't so bloody early in the morning,
I would have laughed even more!!Funny short story. Messa liked!Cam

Message: 4 Date: Mon, 08 Nov 1999 21:46:40 +1100
From: *!* esme *!* <erinwilson@xxxxx.xxx.xx>Subject: Re: Messages.
I really like these short funny fics. hmmm, there obviously isn't enough
crime around to keep all the police people busy. This was really cute, the
messages that Frank and Rachel sent each other were realistic, and so were
Helen and Jack's reactions. groovy.esme

Message: 12 Date: Tue, 09 Nov 1999 03:57:31 +1100
From: Jaye Reid <jayereid@xxxxxxx.xxx.xx>Subject: Feedback:Messages.
Hello Julia!!!!More feedback!Julia Webster wrote:
> Title : MessagesAuthor : JuliaDisclaimer : ::Steals back her toys:: I
> don't wanna share, they're MINE! What do ya mean that Hal will only
> let us play if we share? ohhhhh if I must ::hands toys over to the
> next author::Author's Note : I got a new mobile phone today, and this
> one has the little feature where you can send text messages to other
> mobile phones, and this got me thinking. Hope you like it! warning -
> there is some obscene language in here, nothing that we havn't all
> heard before> though.
> Messages Frank Holloway was bored. Picking up his mobile phone he
> flicked through the options on the menu bar, scrolling down he saw
> something that piqued his interest - Messages.*what's this?* he
> thought. An idea sprung into his mind. Typing as slow as they come he
> managed to get a quick message together and send it off to the
> receiver. Rachel Goldstein was bored, she picked up a file from her
> spotless desk and opened it halfheartedly, her mind not really on its
> contents. A small 'beep' bounced out of her mobile phone in her jacket
> pocket.-BOO->> Well I started laughing about here.... such a thing to do!>
> *What the hell?* Rachel thought. No-one had ever sent her messages on
> her mobile before, let alone one that said -boo-. Pressing a button
> she brought up the sender, the number rang a bell in her mind, but she
> couldn't figure out who it was. She decided to take a gamble and
> return a message in the hope of discovering the identity of the
> mysterious messanger.-Boo too you too- Then she hit the send button,
> curious as to who would do this to her. She sat back in her chair and
> waited for the responce.>
> As you do.... and another classic Rachel thing to do..... No one gets
> the better of Rachel Goldstein>
> Frank heard a small beep from his phone and an envelope flashed
> on its screen.*bingo!* he thought, and pressed a button to read the
> message. Reading it, he wondered if she knew who he was.*probably not*
> he ended up concluding, he had only just brought the phone before
> leaving for the Islands, Rachel wouldn't know the number, let alone
> have it stored on her phone. He tried to think of a way of subtly
> telling her who and where he was, without giving up too many secrets.
> He hit the reply button.>
> Oh now I like the way you have introduced the time and place and
> setting of this fic.... At first I thought he must have been out on a
> case and she was perhaps in the office... I was wondering why she
> wouldn't know her best friends mobile number... but it all made sense.>>
> -Water, water everywhere, but not a drop to drink-*that should twig
> something in the brilliant brain of hers* he thought as he sent the
> message off. He sat back and waited for the responce. Rachel heard
> another beep from her phone and another message popped up on her
> screen.*what the?? What's water got to do with anything? Who? What?
> No.. it couldn't be? Frank?* A million thoughts raced around her mind,
> filling her head with possibilities of where her old partner would be.
> She tried to think of a way to make sure it was him, without letting
> them know they held the upper hand.-Brissie nice this time of year?-
> she typed, then hit the send button. Frank heard+ another beep,
> another message from Rachel flashed around his screen. *Yep, she
> knows* he thought.
I really liked this part of them confirming that they knew what wasgoing on
> *Hell, might as well talk to her, let her know whats doing around
> here* another voice popped into his head *Yeah, like thats alot,
> water, water, and more bloody water* Pushing the thought aside he
> typed another message back to his partner, and
> wishing-was-more-than-partner.-Yeah, lots of Miss Worlds there too.
> Big boobed sheilas all over the place :)- he punched in, and hit the
> send button, only to realise too late that the number was
> different. Jack Cristy grabbed his mobile phone as a small beep
> emerged from it.*what the hell?* he thought as he read the message.
> *Big boobed sheilas?!?!?!?!* He looked at the screen, and punched in
> an abusive reply, only noticing to late, that he had sent it to
> someone else. Helen Blakemore heard a beep from her mobile in her
> bag.*what on earth?* she thought. Grabbing her phone she read the
> message, her mouth falling open in shock.-Who the hell do you think
> you are, sending people shit like that?-Helen typed in a burt, brief
> reply and sent if back to its recipiant.
This is such a comedy of errors. So much in character, Jack and Helen
were a great addition, . it is such a perfect twist
> Frank was beginning to wonder who the hell had gotten his message, it
> sure wasn't Rachel, but there hadn't been a reply yet. He wished he
> knew how to use the bloody thing so he could check who he sent it too,
> now all he could do was wait.*Bugger this* he thought, and typed
> another message to Rachel.-Just you and me and the big blue sea,
> what'd ya reckon Rachy?- Flashed up on Rachels' screen. Smiling she
> typed in a reply, and sent it off.- Dream on mate! do miss ya though,
> gotta love those long nights we spent together :wink:- Another beep,
> another message flashed up on Helen's screen.*Oh no, not again* she
> thought, and sent a rather abusive message to who she thought was the
> sender.-Just RACK OFF- bounced onto Rachel's screen.*what the hell?*
> she thought again, pressing a few more button she realised that the
> message had come from Helen's phone, not Franks. She jumped out of her
> chair, bounded out of the office and down the stairs to the reception
> area. Helen was fuming behind the counter when she arrived."Helen,
> what is this all about?" Rachel held up her phone, the message still
> displayed prominantly across the screen."I... there was....heck I
> dunno, I got these weird messages on my mobile, and I must have got
> your number by mistake. Rachel, I'm so sorry, but who's been sending
> these messages?" Helen looked befuddled."Frank, well he started it,
> then I must have hit your number by mistake, hang on.. can I see your
> phone for a minute?" Rachel grabbed Helen's mobile as it was offered
> to her. Pressing a few buttons Rachel scrolled through to find some
> interesting names on the list. One of which was Jacks, the other one
> her own which she had sent to Helen by mistake. She burst out laughing
> when she worked out what was going on. None of them being
> technilogical geniouses had all sent messages to the wrong people by
> mistake. Se explained this to Helen, who in turn burst out laughing,
> sending the entire team behind the counter into shock!"That it" Rachel
> claimed "Let the phone wars BEGIN!" Finis Okay it was corney, weird,
> and totally spacked out, but who cares :)
This was a funny fic... Classic comedy.... (: Jaye