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From Esme Julia - CARKEYS Julia fluff!! This was immensely amusing. Things were obviously getting pretty heated there in the office!! It was just great, I loved all the bits with Frank's "effort factor". So how *exactly* did the keys get thrown over the cliff?? <g>!! Message: 14 Date: Wed, 01 Dec 1999 17:16:20 +1100 From: Jaye Reid <jayereid@xxxxxxx.xxx.xx>Subject: Feedback: Car Keys Feedback time! Julia, do you know why they are damaged... it's because you have been playing with them far too roughly.... be gentle! <g>Julia Webster wrote: > Title: CarkeysAuthor: JuliaDisclaimer : Time to play with my toys > again... what do you mean they aint mine? but this one is DAMAGED..... > that means Hall dont want it anymore...Authors note: okay I been dared > to Ness, Suz and Cam to write some more fluff to work off my Caffeine > hyperactivity... so guys.. this ones for you! > Carkeys > ----------------------------------------------------------------------- > Rachel Goldstein swore for the first time all day. Again she tried > to wrestle the car door open... and again, nothing happened." ARGH!" > She screamed in frustration. Where the hell were the keys when she > needed them, as soon as she recalled where the keys actually were.. > she screamed again.*Why the hell did Frank have to throw the keys OVER > the friggin cliff... just cos HE rolled over them?* she thought, then > blushed at the thought. > Why isn't she bellowing at Frank then... Hmm, he rolled on them... > what was he doing on the ground to roll on them? Oh...<big cheesy > grin... I'm going to like this one I think> > The relationship between herself and her partner Frank Holloway had > blossomed rather quickly over the past couple of days, to the point > where it was hard to keep their hands off each other during office > hours. Determined to keep work with work, and pleasure with pleasure, > they had decided to drive to a beautiful scenic lookout after a hard > days work at the office. Perfect for some quality time together. That > was the plan anyway.> Oh yes I like this idea... > Having found the back seat of the car rather tiresome, they had > decided to be daring, and go out in public.*Heck its dark and there's > like no-one around* they had thought while they practically devoured > each other. Rachel was astounded at her newfound confidence, quite > happy to let her lovelife creep into her work life, happy to releave > that she and Frank were actually having a relationship, and didn't > give a damn what anyone else thought.> > Now this is a real revelation! I am trying to picture Rachel not > caring who knew. Fanfic is brilliant because you can basically play > with the characters minds anyway that you want... > *Hell* she thought * I'm lovesick, and guess what.. I dont CARE* she > smirked to herself as she futilely tugged on the doorhandle." > FRANKKKKKKK!" She yelled to the drowsy figure lying on the grass." > hrmmphhhhhhhhhhhhh yaa what mmmmphhhhhhh" was the reply she got." > Frank... you friggin well threw the carkeys over the bloody CLIFF and > now we're stuck here!" she practically screamed at him. He raised his > head at the angry voice erupting his euphoric brain. A few thoughts > fluttered through his cloudy happy mind.*effort factor.... nope.. not > getting up.... Rachel mad factor.. okay.. now that requires the effort > factor.... hrmmmmm*> > LOL... this little thought process is so cleverly written..> > Meanwhile Rachel searched the pockets of her jacket (which she > had decided to take with her on the excursion to the grass for some > obscure reason)> she's a Detective that's why! > and dug out her mobile phone. Glancing at the battery level, she swore > again." SHIT! aww FRIGGIN HELL!"> So Rachel when she is really pissed off > *Effort factor REQUIRED* sprang into Frank's mind, he rolled over to > find Rachel swearing at her phone." Rachybaby.. wazzzz wrong?" he > slurred, his mind still in the state of total euphoria from... was it > 3 or...... was it 4.. awwww.... heck.. effort factor. Rachel just > looked at Frank, he looked so inocent, lying there, curled up on the > grass. She had to tell him of their predicament." Frank.... FRANK... > you THREW the keys over the cliff, and I only have enough battery left > for one phone call. Who are we gonna call?" She moved over to him, > covereing him with a few more kisses to help him think clearer. > God, they really CAN'T keep their hands of each other... this is so> funny! > " Ghostbusters" he giggled into her mouth, making her burst out > laughing herself. Frank paused butterfly kissing Rachel's neck for a > second to ponder the options.> LOL > " Hows about Helen?" he murmered, gazing into her eyes for a > responce." Nah.. I dont wanna get ANOTHER lecture from her. How's > about.... Taylor?"" Nah......she'd start bloody gossiping again. Hows > about Jack?"" You gotta be bloody KIDDING! Get Real! I'd rather get > Jeff out here and explain why the keys to his brand new 99 Magna D car > are now in the ocean!" Rachel shot back at him.> > LOL... yeah Frank I'd have to agree with Rachel on that one... I know, > he just wants to be able to brag to Jack about what he and Rachel were > doing there...> > *argh.. effort factor taking toll* Frank's mind yelled at him, making > it even harder to think. Rachel just stared at him again *DAMN those > EYES!* Frank's mind leapt up at him."well... I'd say we call... we > call....the NRMA!" Rachel shouted gleefully. *Man why didn't I think > of that before* she smiled....dailing the number and talking to the > operator. A moment later she hung up her phone, placed it in her > jacket pocket, and went back to Frank." Hey Frankie... we got an > hour... shall we?" she hinted." God Rachie... I think I'm gonna need > H.E.L.P myself">> LOL.... LOL... This ending is so classic and just so funny! > Lovely comedy fic this one!>> (:> Jaye |
