Eternal Flame... Song by the Bangles

Eternal Flame: a songfic on Makoto and Hiei. Author: Sonya-chan sonyas@clic.net

This fanfic is rated R because of a rather racy scene in the songfic. Racy but no descriptions so that's why I gave it an R rating. If you think you shouldn't be reading this... then don't. I leave it to your better judgment.

This song was: Written by: S. Hoffs/B. Steinberg/T. Kelly Main Voice: Susanna

Eternal Flame

 

Song Intro:

(Makoto and Hiei are looking Ken and the kitsune children go back to the 30th Century. They are next to each other still dressed in traditional kimonos. They are sitting on the ground apart from the others.)

Close your eyes,

(Makoto puts her head on Hiei's shoulder and closes her eyes)

Give me your hand, darling

(Hiei looks down on her, a small smile on his lips. He takes her hand.)

Do you feel my heart beating?

(Hiei places her hand on his heart and looks into her eyes.)

Do you understand?

(Makoto looks him in the eyes and smiles softly to him.)

Do you feel the same?

(Makoto nods to the unspoken question, Hiei's smile widens as they move closer)

Am I only dreaming?

(Hiei and Makoto kiss passionately, uncaring if the others are spying on them.)

Is this burning an eternal flame?

(Cross dissolve into the next scene: We are now at Makoto's apartment.It is dark and we see a form asleep in the bed. Outside it is raining and there is lightning streaking the sky.)

I believe it's meant to be, darling.

(Hiei jumps on the balcony, he opens the window and quickly gets inside dripping wet. He has just come back from the Makai and he has come straight to Makoto.)

I watch you when you are sleeping,

(Hiei approaches the bed and watches Makoto as she sleeps her arms are hugging a huge black pillow. Hiei smiles.)

You belong with me.

(Hiei quickly takes off his dripping clothes off in the darkness of her room and throws it away.)

Do you feel the same?

(Hiei slips into the bed next to her, warming himself a bit in the bed before touching her face.)

Am I only dreaming?

(Hiei takes away the pillow from her grasp and replaces it with himself. Makoto sleepily looks up.)

Or is this burning an eternal flame?

(Makoto feels the warmth of Hiei's body against her, she smiles snuggling tenderly to the Koorime.)

Say my name; sun shines through the rain

(Makoto whispers: "Hiei-chan..." Hiei feels his heart burst by the way she says his name.)

A whole life so lonely

(Hiei closes his eyes remembering how lonely he felt in the Makai...)

And then you come and ease the pain

(...Before he knew Makoto. He felt like an hollowed soul.)

I don't want to lose this feeling

(But not anymore, since he is in her arms. He looks to her and gives her a passionate kiss.)

Oooh!... <Bridge> (There are a series of stills of Hiei and Makoto together. Hiei and Makoto at a formal party, going grocery shopping. Them reclining against a tree, another shot where they are next to Yaten and Kurama sleeping in the grass, Makoto looks at the camera winking and shushing us. Hiei is teasing Kurama with a blade of grass. Kurama still asleep shoos the 'fly' away. Makoto and Hiei in front of the Crystal Tokyo Palace.)

(Scene cuts back to Makoto and Hiei in bed. Hiei is draped over Makoto.)

Say my name; sun shines through the rain

(Hiei is holding on to Makoto, whimpering her name as he reached his climax, Makoto's face is as flushed as he.)

A whole life so lonely

(Makoto's eyes closes and she sees herself as her first boyfriend leaves her. How empty she has felt. She was never was able to find love after that...)

And then you come and ease the pain.

(Until Hiei came into her life, two lonely soul that felt complete finally)

I don't want to lose this feeling.

(Hiei sleeps in Makoto's arms as she brushes his hair with her fingers, she kisses his forehead. We pan back until we see them through the window. Our vision is blurred by the rain.)

(Change of scene: In the Makai, an older Hiei and Lady Makoto just were felled by a jealous Mukuro. Their children, Kurama's children deal the killing blow to Mukuro but it's already too late)

Close your eyes, give me your hand.

(Makoto reaches for Hiei's hand, once she touches it her eyes closes.)

Do you feel my heart beating?

(Hiei coughs blood but he cries out her name as her hand goes limp. Mukuro laughs madly, she won.)

Do you understand?

(Hiei eyes become bleak as he understands that Makoto is dead. Ken runs to them, stops and clenches his fist in defeat.)

Do you feel the same?

(A single tear falls from Hiei's eye it turns into a black tear gem. Ignoring his own pain he howls his sadness...)

Am I only dreaming?

(There is a soft light coming from Makoto's body and Makoto's soul rises from her deceased body.)

But is this burning an eternal flame?

(Hiei looks at her she is beautiful, with a smile on his lips he calls her name. "She's so beautiful... with her angel wings..." Ken looks where he is staring but sees nothing. Hiei's eyes are glassy and Ken looks away knowing all too well that his father will soon die.)

<Chorus of many voices> Close your eyes,

(Makoto reaches for Hiei's face and she closes his eyes, he draws his last breath.)

give me your hand, darling

(Makoto extends her hand, Hiei's own bodiless hand raises to take her hand in his.)

Do you feel my heart beating?

(Makoto helps Hiei stand up. Hiei sees his own wing and they embrace tenderly)

Do you understand?

(On Hiei's corpse the Jagan rises and blinds momentarily. The Black Dragon rises from Hiei's arm and goes to wind around Ken's.)

Do you feel the same?

(When everyone can see clearly again, they see Hiei and Makoto with angel wings hugging each other tenderly.)

Am I only dreaming?

(Ken understands that they are now reunited forever, Mukuro failed in separating them.)

Is this burning an eternal flame?

(Mukuro looks at the scene blinking understanding that in her madness she destroyed their bodies but that their souls were as vibrant as ever.)

Close your eyes, give me your hand, darling

(Hiei and Makoto walk to Ken and smile to him and tell him that all will be well...)

Do you feel my heart beating?

(Mukuro cringes when she sees them advancing towards her, their star seed brightly shining.)

Do you understand?

(Makoto and Hiei look down to Mukuro, but there is no hatred in their eyes. The glow intensifies, Mukuro screams but blinks when she realizes that her wounds are healed, both in mind and body)

Do you feel the same?

(Hiei and Makoto look up and they see Botan floating towards them. They look back at Mukuro who looks at them incredulous that they saved her after all she has done.)

Am I only dreaming?

(The mortals look up as Hiei's and Makoto's immortal souls spread their wings.)

an eternal flame...

(They fly up, holding hands, following Botan to the Reikai. Their two star seed shine brightly in the sky long after they disappear...)

(Change scene: We are back into Makoto's apartment.)

Close your eyes, give me your hand, darling

(Makoto and Hiei sleep in each others' arm, hugging tenderly in their sleep.)

Do you feel my heart beating?

(Hiei snuggles closer in Makoto's embrace. The camera pans back as the song dies down. It pans until we are back at the window looking in, the rain hits the window.)

Do you understand? Do you feel the same? Am I only dreaming? Is this burning an eternal flame?

(As the camera fades to black the music is slowly replaced by the sound of the rain falling.)

The End!

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There! Did you guys like it? I know it was a little sad (and no I don't know if it's the way Hiei and Makoto will die... that was just the song that inspired me to write that) I went shopping the other day and I saw that disk of the Bangles in the discount bin, it was cheap I said heck why not... I love 'Walk like an Egyptian' and 'Manic Monday' they were there so I bought it. When I came back home and played it, I fell in love with the last song 'Eternal Flame' I went on the internet to look at the lyric and after hearing about ten times on a loop: it inspired me for a song on Hiei and Makoto.

Well when I read the title I thought I could make a songfic for them. But when I heard the song, the images just came to mind. Hope you enjoyed it. That purchase was a real find because it also inspired me with a songfic from Yaten and Kurama : Manic Monday =)

Ja!

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