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| Comments: I really liked your script. I must have taken balls to vary from the formats of the trilogy so much. I think i would be better if Ripley and Call did not appear in it. Your script does not need them. But it could benifit from a stronger hero character who could perhaps even survive the finale. I'm looking forward to reading your updated part 2 of the script. good work man |
Hooray! A positive comment. I didn't believe they existed. I am glad that there is somebody out there who agrees that the films need to be taken in a new direction. I have included Ripley and Call more in the rewrite because I have grown to like them. The
new ending will be more upbeat and I don't think I'll kill many people. I would be interested to see who you thought would make a good hero from the characters in the script (none of the marines as they are dead as of the rewrite)?
12/23/97 18:53:30
| Comments: I'd like to make a few more comments. Ripley's character is completely different from the Earlier movies she should be a little more human - not completely -but a little more than in Alien Ressurection. She also needs to play a larger role. She didn't apear until the movie was half over! As far as call's role, it worked out pretty good, but she should still have more lines. It would also help if there were more survivors and if the end wasn't so Depressing. Depressing films might have morre meaning, but realistically speaking Audiences don't buy into it |
This is pretty much what everybody else said to me. I do think it was a mistake not having her in as much, but she must evolve as a person. She has to be different to her Alien and Aliens roles. She isn't even Ripley anymore, she is a clone
nd is part alien. I don't want to totally remove the Ripley from Ripley, but she is different and I think this is interesting. Sorry about the depressing story. I happen to think that people dying is prety depressing, but I will try to liven up the ending
12/22/97 17:00:23
| Comments: If u want to make your script better u better put Ripley and Call in it because with outthem ur script sucks so if i was u i would put Ripley and Call in the script. |
They are in the script! Just cos' they aren't the big stars and this is more of an ensemble piece doesn't make it bad. Anyway, with the brunt of my feedback suggesting they should be in it more, I'm gonna put them back in. Are you happy yet? Ohh, the woes
of pleasing the lowest common denominator.
12/22/97 16:53:12
| Comments: I thought the first half of the 1st draft was very good, but the 2nd half and the end was dissapointing. I think that, since this is the 2nd to last sequel (with ripley in it anyway) it should turn the fight around. instead of everyone running away they hould destroy all of the aliens on earth, that way the next alien sequel can be an offensive attack on one of the aliens home planets. --Another comment, the alien shipthey arrived on can't be a ship that the aliens built, even if it could it can't be li e the one from Alien, because the was another sepicies of alien on that ship. The pilot alien and his ship had apparently fallen the fate of the Nostromo |
I realise that the second half was a little poor. I am currently rewriting the second half and it will be better. Unfortunately I don't agree on humanities chances of destroying the aliens if they reach Earth. I still think they'd be pretty much up shit c
eek. I'll try to make the new ending less depressinng...
12/21/97 03:18:39
| Comments: All I've got to say is that if it doesn't have Hicks in it, I'm not interested. Good luck on your script. |
Thanks!
12/12/97 01:10:11
| Comments: THE POPE?!?! Come ON! And you make Ripley and Call sound like an afterthougt, like "The Pope this, the Pope that...and oh yeah, Ripley and Call are in my way." |
Yeah, I now they don't get in it much but I am rectifying this in the new re-write. Do you think Rome was built in a day! No, it wasn't and this is the kind of feedback I need. Constructive (well he didn't slag me off too badly), explains what is wrong an
gives me areas to focus on. Ohh, and the Pope is only in it for the title sequence. He has a very small part, honestly.
12/11/97 22:11:14
| Comments: Let it be known they if you have dreams of submitting this to Fox, they won't accept it unless to get an agent to submit it for you. |
I have no plans as yet to submit this. It's really just a piece of fan-fiction. When it reaches a level that I think (and you think) is worthy of even being read by an agent then I might consider this. The main reason I put this page up was in order to ge
feedback from you lot.